Recursive Process – In order to get to my final draft I had to make many global and local revisions throughout my drafts. For global revisions I completely changed the structure of my paper, starting with my introduction. My first introduction didn’t work well with my paper because it didn’t properly introduce the background of my topic. After doing the introduction project and still improving the introduction after, I was able to get a fluent introduction for my paper. I found the project for homework very helpful, for the reason it helped my determine what needed to be in my introduction and what did not. Also when looking at my first draft it shows that I only wrote in the pattern of literacy narratives which confused the reader of what my main point was, or what I was arguing. So in my final draft I changed it from contrasting the two educational levels using the narratives as a form of data. I was able to see this issue by talking to both professor Grumbling and Cripps. I also found that some of the data I was using wasn’t as helpful as I thought, so I found some new data in between the drafts to help support my statement better. Like in my first draft I completely disregaured one literacy narrative that I though was helpful, but ended up not being.
Integrating Ideas – Integrating the ideas of others with different forms of text was a bit challenging, but after sorting out the information I was using it wasn’t so bad. I was able to fluently combine the ideas of Alexander, Brandt, and Gee to support my argument against the education system. Using the the ideas from the literacy narratives I was able to connect certain quotes to support the ideas of the scholars or vis versa. When looking at my first paragraph you can see that I was able to explain my issue being addressed and then gave a quote from Gee to explain combinations of literacy. Following I used the ideas from narratives to support Gees definition. I did affirm Gee because I showed that they were not getting all combinations which caused them to fail. Which then lead to my next paragraph to being a victim ideas of Alexander. Even though I did not challenge some of their ideas because I agreed with them,I did show they there could be a different way of saying what they were saying. Like with Brandt and her thoughts of sponsorship I agreed with, but found it interesting that she didn’t talk much about how a sponsor needs to be engaged. Not just do what’s expected by the books. Also I was able to integrate my own theory of how these school systems are focused on these standards that clearly are allowing students to fail and it’s not okay. For an example in the last paragraph it has me asking small questions that relate back to my first question that way the reader can see where I am coming from or thinking about. After stating anything I always gave the reader a clear explanation on why the quote was put there, or where I was going with the paragraph.
Final Draft with comments showing where integrating is being shown
Active Reading – All throughout this semester I have been actively reading all the readings assigned for class and even some more to help find evidence for my paper. For each reading I annotated by either highlighting, note taking, or chunking. I found that color coding was the most efficient way to sort out ideas and definitions through the text. As linked below you will see that I ask questions while reading the entries because I don’t understand everything due to the advanced wording, or ideas. When I raised a question with the reading I asked Professor Grumbling during our SASC meeting or a classmate that I see to better understand it. I was also able to find connections through the readings from previous passages read through my time at UNE an integrate the ideas. Especially Gee I feel like I can always connect someone’s ideas to Gee. I also sometimes find myself connecting the ideas to things outside of school like life events to help me remember what the scholar is saying. It is interesting to notice how similar someone’s ideas can be to others, but so different at the same time. Which helped when I went to go write my paper because I knew where things would be a challenge or an affirm. I also was very efficient and did all of the blog post assigned for the readings on time and to my best ability. During class discussions I always tried to be involved other than when I didn’t understand something that when I would just listen to figure out where my disconnect was.
Critique of Work – While reviewing other student papers I found that it was more important to addresses the global issues of the papers that I was proof reading verse the local revisions. The reason being is that in reality the spelling and local revisions won’t help develop a producative paper. When looking at my comments of peers papers for an example Dylan’s the advice I gave him whether he choose to take it or not was to change the structure of his paper, or address his main point better. Same with Carolina I found that a proper introduction to the reader on what she was explain was not there. So I made sure it was known that they needed to improve on some spots from a reader’s view to help them see where stuff wasn’t connecting. I never expressed hate towards there papers and never meant to be rude in anyway when addressing my comments. I was just trying to help them know where to clarify issues in their paper. It was nice to be able to talk about the revisions in class as well as through google docs. the reason being that sometimes going through a screen can be confusing on what the reader is saying so as a peer review allowing them to explain what they are trying to say will help me lead them in the right way. I also made sure I acted like I didn’t read any of the scholarly text to make sure that they proper explained the quotes they used and introduced them that way it would be clear to any reader. Like in Dylan and Carolinas I found that being a bit of a challenge. Which is fine because it was only a draft and theres always room improvement
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Documenting Work -In my paper whenever I introduce a source as a form of data I introduce it to the reader. I indicated where it came from and who it was by before stating it to the reader. I then following the quote and MLA standards cited it correctly. In my first paragraph I did exactly that with both the scholarly evidence and literacy narratives.An example would be in the first paragraph when I use both Larson and Hibbards literacy narratives I introduce to the reader what it is that the quotes are coming from.I also introduced everything in my introduction. While using the quotes I made sure I used the right vocabulary to make sure it flowed. Following my paper I made sure I had a work cited page that followed MLA standards according to little seagull. It was done all my hand and not through an online generator because they do not always come out correct with the information it grabs from the internet.
Error Control – During the process of drafting I did take the time to proof read my paper and make comments to myself to look back at when editing. I also had to come up with questions in order to have a meeting with Cripps which aloud me to already break down my paper and figure out what I was struggling with. Using the TRICA and Barclays’s activity along with the coordination and subordination activity in class helped me see some area that needed help When making multiple drafts I had to develop a plan to fix all the errors either my peers, or I found. I do think that in my final draft I still had some grammar mistakes, but it is hard to figure out when some are run-on or not. I do think this is an area for improvement, even though I did catch some throughout the drafting process I’m sure I didn’t catch all of them. I did proof read my paper numerous amounts of time before submitting it and it did help me to break down each sentence by sentence to find where I went wrong.
Engagement- All throughout this semester I have been actively involved in this course. I have attended all the classes and participated when I understood what was going on, or at least tried to have an explanation for what was being asked. In small groups I did make sure we were on task and everything needed to be covered was covered. Also with peer reviews I always tried to give them the best advice I had. Same with the homework I tried my hardest on all the assignments. They were always done on time and to the best of my ability even when they were more complex. In this paper I did try a new approach to my writing style because I never really did a structure like I did in my final draft. Although I felt uncomfortable doing it at first I realized the format I had didn’t help me in anyway and it was wrong. I did try to improve with my paper by always trying to better my paper. I alway looked at to find new things that could be changed and took advantage of SASC and Professor Cripps office hours. I would say I have been fully involved in this course by being an active student.
