Framing Revision
Writing as a Recursive Process:
Through out my literacy narrative I continually changed my thoughts on the paper. I didn’t a couple prewriting activities as shown below. I then made my first draft which then got changed into my second draft. If you take a look between both drafts you will see both local and global changes. Once I read through my first draft I noticed that I had information throughout that I did not need. Also of course had some grammer mistakes throughout that I fixed, which I do need some more work on framing throughout my paper. I do think I did a great job with imagery so my reader can imagine the story in their own mind. I do think I could of done some more polishing throughout the paper though.
Active Reading, Critical Reading, and Informal Reading Response:
In order to figure out what my own literacy narrative was I had to learn about it. I did that through the readings of Sherman Alexie and Welthy If you look at both of my annotations you will see that I actively highlight, underline, and analysis the text throughout the reading. Analyzing each paragraph as I go helps me understand what is going on. Sometime it was a challenge to continue to read when I couldn’t grasp a topic talked about in the story, but if I continued to read through it I could eventually figure out the meaning behind the story. Eventually I got the hang of it, and even when I had a question I would write it down and ask either Amy or Jen.
Critique Own and Others’ Work:
When it first came to peer review I thought we were to just fix or give feedback on local problems. I didn’t fully understand what global problems were. Once we reviewed in class I had a better understanding on how to revise a paper. AN example is when i reviewed my two classmates; Sky and Bailey. I gave both them some local feedback, but focuses more so on the bigger problems. Such as did they have literacy sponser, did they have enough imagery, what there a specific impact on your life with it, or were they able to arise from the problem. After I reviewed theirs it got me thinking about my own paper, so while I was reviewing my first draft I started to make sure I answered the prompt fully throughout. I differently think I strengthened my ability to notice global issues in academic writing with this prompt which helped with future prompts. I do think I need to continue to work on it but I at least now have a better understanding.
Control Individual Error Patterns:
In my earlier writing I had a lot of information that was confusing the reader. It caused confusion because it didn’t have much to do with the actual prompt. During my first peer review I noticed that it needed to be fixed. I got rid of the information that wasn’t needed such as my dad starting to work nights. It was needed in my paper because that was the image I was trying present. Even when I look at my final draft I do think there is still some information that can be confusing to the reader that I would like to get rid of. I do think I am progressing in this framework, but still feel that I add extra information that isn’t needed.
1st Draft
This is my first draft to the literacy narrative. I have not made any prior edits to this paper, it is the original. While typing my paper it took about an hour. I basically kept writing until I felt like I told my story. My main point of the first draft was to figure out my ideas and what my literacy narrative was. I quickly went back over it and revised my thoughts. Didn’t focus that much on it because it was only a first draft. It helped that I already had a game plan from Amy.I enjoyed going over my draft with Amy it did help a lot with my seconded draft.
Final Draft
This is my final draft for the literacy narrative. I have made quite a few adjustments to the paper since the first draft. I made these revisions after talking through my paper with both Professor Gennaco and Amoroso. The process that I went through to get my final draft was really beneficial to me and helped me breakdown my paper in many different ways. The peer reviews gave great feedback through out the revision classes. Also the time we took to talk about framing helped me go back and fix any fragments I had in my paper.
Prewriting activities
