Framing:
Active reading, Critical Reading, and Informal Reading Response:
In the second part of English 122 I have annotated all of the required chapter of “They Say, I Say”, Cuddy, Gee, and Delpit. As shown in my prewriting link I annotated each very similarly. I did annotate the Gee piece a little differently because of the fact that I didn’t fully understand the text. So instead I continued to as questions are what was being discussed vs giving up on the reading as a whole. I was fluent with highlighting key terms, underlining, paraphrasing, asking questions, and engaging in the text by noticing similar situations. I do think that I have strengthened in actively reading and being able to identify the outcomes of the story, or article. All examples of my annotations are below:
Integrate Ideas with Those of Others:
The two sources I used in this paper was Delpit and Gee. I was able to understand the methods needed to enter a secondary discourse through their articles. When first introducing both Delpit and Gee I used Barclays formula. I used the formula when I was explaining how Gee thinks you can only enter a secondary discourse through apprenticeship, where Delpit thinks that it can be shown through education. This paragraph is the seconded paragraph in my final draft. All throughout I demonstrated the “They say, I Say” format. After I would explain a quote I would explain my thoughts on the quote. I do think I strengthen the ability to show my voice throughout the paper. Even though I do think that I could of found some better quote and explained some quotes better.
Writing as a Recursive Process:
When reviewing my process of developing my final draft I was able to notice the changes I made throughout. In the beginning I did my pre-write which was very general it just stated my structure and claim. When I started to write my first draft I was able to develop some evidence throughout my paper to support my methods. When I was going through my final draft I realized I needed some more I say. I did that by adding some real life examples that I was using as my evidence. I also cut some of the information that wasn’t needed out of my final and rearranged some of my paper to make it flow better. I but a lot of effort into each draft and took note of all comments given too me throughout.
Critique Own and Others’ Work:
When revising my own work I was able to notice fragments throughout and eliminating information that wasn’t needed to support my thesis. I was able to tell the difference between global and local revisions. When editing my paper I made sure I answered the question that the prompt was implying. I was also able to help my classmate by explaining that her claim was not clear and that she wasn’t going completely in the right direction. I also gave her a few comments on local problems but focused more on feedback for the prompt. I do wish I labeled my comments with the category, but I was confused on the concept. I know understand that I should characterize my comments in the future. Below is one of my comments made on a peer.
Document Work using Appropriate Conventions:
In this prompt we were told to use the MLA format. Which I did do throughout my whole paper. When I was quoting the articles I would make sure if I did not introduce the writer in the beginning I would, then at the end of my quote place both the author and paper number not just the paper number. I also had a work cited page that was properly cited with MLA. It was also in alphabetical order and had a hanging indent. I do think this was more of a strength for me because that was the format used in my high school. Also need to note next time to add a header at the top of my paper. If you look at my final draft below you will see my MLA format.
Control Individualized Error Patterns:
While reviewing my first and seconded draft comments I realized that I did access most of the issues that were brought to my attenetion. I started with my big issue of not having enough “I say”. If you look below you will see I inserted an image of where I added some “I Say” in. I also didn’t clarify enough some of my example, so I went back and added more to support my example. I also do think I need to make sure to go back and check for fragment and grammical errors. I do think I have improved since the last essay. I have less fragments and a better use of apsotrophs.
Drafts:
Prewriting: (Scroll down to second activity)
