While revising my paper it really helped to look at my peer reviewers comments prior to trying to fix anything about my paper. Also after reading the comments made by peers I went back and did the assignments of making an outline, that outlined allowed me to ask and answer the questions in habits of a creative mind. While asking some questions I realized a main issue in my paper is the gap between my scholar information and data. I feel as if my opinion is not very well incorporated, but my data is good. I also am realizing after this editing process that my paper is of path, and its not very well flowed. I really am considering different ways of structuring my paper in order to allow the reader to be less confused with my point. I can tell that I was very lost in my own thoughts. After getting some clarity, I can now develop better thoughts to express what I am saying with my own thoughts, Gee’s ideas, and my data. It also almost goes off a cliff towards the end, as my peer reviewer said my information gets duller as my paper progresses. So this is definitely an area for help, but I think once I restructure my ideas will be clearer. I am most curious on if their is places I can challenge maybe, or even make more complex of a claim or idea. I need to really go back and focus on what TASK are most important to my paper, also make sure everything am saying makes sense in the form of a structure. I want to make my voice known more, because I do think it lacks my own opinion as stated before. Overall I have some areas that need to be worked on, but I think once I did this assignment, and asked the questions from the reading it helped my break down my paper.
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