Dear Peer Reviewer,
- Question: My issue or question I am trying to show through my paper is why is it that most literacy sponsors that show a positive interaction with a students and allow literacy success are not found until higher education? I show this question in my introduction along with ways that might support my question. I each paragraph I continue to talk about the issue, but present why that issue might be occurring. I am having an issue with my question a little bit I am not sure if it is exactly what I am trying to get at. If you have any advice after reading my paper if changing my question around a bit to make it flow better I would enjoy hearing your thoughts.
- My Data Shows: In the literacy narratives I am reading I do find a lot of them that explain that the negative part of their literacy success comes from their early education years. It is not until high school where most kids are finding their sponsor. I do have some points that support my question but my last point is really weak and would like to find a way to fix it. If you look at the last paragraph it is very weak with information. I didn’t know how to explain that the ways of prewriting are not shown until higher education and this can cause a lot of confusion. I am also struggling with ways to relate things to scholars, if you have any advice I would like to hear about it.
- I’m Adding to the Scholarly Conversation: As I stated before I am struggling with relating my issues to scholarly text. I do have some quote within my paper, but I do not know if they are strong enough. I do try to transition using the Barclays formula in my 2nd body paragraph. I am also confused on who I should relate my issue to at the moment I find Gee and Brandt the best people to relate my issues too. The quotes that I do have within my paper are there to try and support my literacy narratives. To prove that they are right in what they are saying. If you think there is another point from either the same or different scholar I would love some suggestions.
- I’m affirming or challenging a Concept in X: Throughout my paper I am mainly affirming my points with the ideas of scholars. As you can see in the first body paragraph I affirm that a sponsor must show engagement in order for a student to show a positive response. I use Brandt’s idea of a sponsorship to show that all sponsors are people that show engagement and care for their students. I also try to use Gee to affirm that a student can know how to read and write but that doesn’t mean they are doing it the right way in my 2nd body paragraph to relate to the idea of middle school teacher making class feel like a discipline. I am unsure if this way of affirming is effective should I be more clear or should I focus on challenging the issues more. Am I coming from the right direction here or should I be coming into my paper differently. Please give me any suggestions you have about the idea of challenging or affirming.
- collreadwrit2e
